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Grammar question...


This is really lame but I figured somebody here has to know.. I'm pretty sure I'm right but this instuctor won't grade a paper with grammar or spelling errors at all, so I'm just double checking..

Freedom, peace, democracy; all ideas of what is "American" that our forefathers hoped to instill in the minds of many generations of Americans to come.

Did I use the semicolon correctly?
..I know.. I'm lame.

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I don't think it's an improper usage, but I think it's unnecessary. That could definitely be phrased better.

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how would you phrase it?

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Freedom, peace, democracy; all ideas of what is "American" that our forefathers hoped to instill in the minds of many generations of Americans to come.


Freedom, peace and democracy are all ideas of what is "American" that our forefathers hoped to instill in the minds of many generations to come.

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I just revised a little:

Freedom, peace, democracy; these are all ideas that our forefathers hoped to instill in the minds of many generations of Americans to come.

That sounds better, I believe.

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aah yeah, that sounds good.

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Whatever, this is the dumbest paper I've pretty much ever had to write in college and high school combined. ;)

And actually, as a whole, I'm pretty happy with it. That sentence is funky, but who cares?

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He DOES??


..wow. my whole life is altered.

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PRAISE THE LORD.

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KaCee J wrote:

This is really lame but I figured somebody here has to know.. I'm pretty sure I'm right but this instuctor won't grade a paper with grammar or spelling errors at all, so I'm just double checking..

Freedom, peace, democracy; all ideas of what is "American" that our forefathers hoped to instill in the minds of many generations of Americans to come.

Did I use the semicolon correctly?
..I know.. I'm lame.


No, that is incorrect.  A semicolon should come between two closely related complete sentences, usually where one logically follows the next.  You have only one sentence, and it is of questionable phrasing.  

More importantly, I think that your argument is fundamentally flawed.   Most of the forefathers were concerned with freedom, but peace and democracy are ways they conceived to of achieve freedom, thus they are the means, not the ends.   To say that our forefathers wanted to promote democracy and peace for generations to come is simply not true.   Most of the forefathers wanted Americans to have a rugged sense of self that would promote freedom, but not necessarily foster peace.   Thomas Jefferson even went so far as to say that there should be a revolution every 20 years, as lethargy is the natural enemy of life and freedom.   Essentially, Jefferson was in opposition to a modern sense of peace, as frequent war or upheaval can serve to keep America free. In addition, democracy (In other words, the American democratic republic) was not necessarily something that the forefathers wanted Americans to believe in for generations to come, but was what they thought would be best at the time.  Even then, they didn't really believe in democracy.  The government of the time was a cross between republicanism and virtual democracy, where the elite's view would vaguely shadow those of the non-voters.   If anything, the founding fathers opposed hegemony, and did not necessarily support democracy, especially pure democracy, for its own sake.



-- Edited by SlashXLA at 14:53, 2008-09-26

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This thread demonstrates the ways in which Slash is so very excellent.

It also underlines my puzzlement as to the reason for KaCee's title.

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DEATHPIGGIE wrote:

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Miaow wrote:

This thread demonstrates the ways in which Slash is so very excellent.

It also underlines my puzzlement as to the reason for KaCee's title.




 Don't you have a board with month old topics on the front page to get back to?



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YOU MIGHT BE MISSING OUT ON SOME EXCITING NOTHING.

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DEATHPIGGIE wrote:

Miaow wrote:

This thread demonstrates the ways in which Slash is so very excellent.

It also underlines my puzzlement as to the reason for KaCee's title.




 Don't you have a board with month old topics on the front page to get back to?





DEATHPIGGIE, you sassbag!

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Pizza wrote:

YOU MIGHT BE MISSING OUT ON SOME EXCITING NOTHING.




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SlashXLA wrote:

 


No, that is incorrect.  A semicolon should come between two closely related complete sentences

 



a regular colon is the best choice in this context

 

and i really did not plan on the pun



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you should stick the semicolon up the teacher's colon for being such a douche bag.

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